everyone knew i wasn’t quite right

                standing barefoot —

                                stone walls surrounding me.

the Mad Hatter’s having a tea party

                                                                inside my head —

                but I’m not invited.

small white rabbit stares – still —

                afraid to move —

                                my eyes blur, i blink. he’s gone.

i stumble through my curiosity —
                never fully sure of myself
                                until i fall down the hole —
                                                tumbling head first.

too big

                too small —

                                never just right.

just who am i anyway?

                holding still as a statue

                                to hide myself from the rage

                                                burning from within —

                red as roses

                                painted just right.

Tweedle Dee
                Tweedle Dum —

                                the words my mouth speak

                                                are never my own —

just who am i anyway?

                smoke rings and toadstools —

                                mind-altering wisdom

                                                penetrating prosaic thoughts.

i wake from dreams

                but am never quite there —

                                lost in a multicolored array of flowers

                                                that dare to bloom

                                                                amongst the dried up grass and weeds.

just who am i anyway?

                still the caterpillar —

                                always the caterpillar —

                                                crawling. slowly crawling —

                never flying.

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20 responses to this post.

  1. I loved it! 🙂


  2. Great take on Alice in Wonderland!


  3. Ooo, I loved how the structure imitates the subject matter, and the questioning develops the speaker’s confusion! Loved this poem!


  4. Love it! And how funny that you were just mentioning the big/small thing in regards to my teacher and my writing the other day! 🙂


  5. Impressed. It was a great read and clever use of the prompt.


  6. Quite surreal, enjoyed it.


  7. Very well done! Love the structure of the poem as much as the content. Love this line in particular: “mind-altering wisdom penetrating prosaic thoughts” – wonderful!


  8. the Mad Hatter’s having a tea party / inside my head —
    Love this!
    And the last stanza encapsulates the poem as a whole so well.


  9. Posted by iasoupmama on February 28, 2013 at 9:36 am

    Very cool — I love looking at famous tales from the perspective of a secondary character.


  10. Posted by modmomelleroy on February 28, 2013 at 5:06 pm

    I love this! “penetrating prosaic thoughts” The caterpillar… This is stellar!


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